New Intern and a New Joke

Monday, May 30, 2016

I hope everyone had a great Memorial Day Weekend!  I actually forgot all about it until I was in the Gap in Jackson Heights, wondering why everything was so drastically on sale.

I'm suuuper excited to announce that I have a new intern, and oh God, is she coming at the right time!  Her name is Tracy Gold and when I asked her to do a sample reader's report, I got a two page paper and line edits back.  Um, wow.  ::shoves all the manuscripts at her::

She has a marketing background, which makes me all tingly inside, and since it's been awhile since I had an intern, I know I'm going to enjoy having someone help me out with everything, especially since my list keeps growing!

And to finish up this post, something really random:  I stumbled upon this image and I don't know why, but it cracks me up every time.  Not sure what that says about me, so I'll let you be the judge and maybe join me in a laugh :)  


Query Critique

Monday, May 23, 2016

Query critique time!  For everyone who enters (and those who don't) spread the word so that even if you don't submit a query, you encourage others to read and comment.  Thanks :)





If you're not familiar with how to enter, take a look at my previous post to read the rules.  Good luck!  And don't forget to post any questions you want me to answer in the comments section with the hashtag #IHAVEAQUESTION!

Party & Bullshit (Bullshit Being No BEA for Me)

Monday, May 16, 2016

In my first major effort towards living up to my eventual thirty-ness, I have decided to try to eat healthier, because we all know my metabolism is one step away from failing.  Just kidding about the metabolism failing part, but I do need to eat better.  Instead of grocery shopping, I have been known to eat the odd ice cream sandwich for lunch and skip breakfast entirely.  Right now I'm eating a bowl of fruit, even the melon bits, which I hate.

I haven't had time to think of the other aspects of being thirty, however, because I have been BUSY.  Lots of phone calls and meetings last week, as well as the Old Stone House Soiree, which was so much fun because I had authors there (yay for Jessie and Kim) and many books on display (yay Team Carrie)!



I also signed the wonderful Brian Zepka, whose YA novel (hilariously and completely coincidentally) is about a future America where a wall is erected to halt illegal immigration, and an adopted teen risks his life helping other get through while searching for a friend that got left behind years ago.  I know, awesome!!

All of these to-dos meant that I only had a very small amount of time to mourn BEA 2016 and the fact that I did not make the trek to Chicago, credit card in hand to deal with the extra baggage fees, as I wish I did.  I looked at the pictures on Twitter briefly last weekend and the rows and rows of gorgeous, pre-publication glory, and well....sighhh, I'll get over it.

:*(




OMG I'm Going to Be 30

Monday, May 9, 2016

In celebration of Mother's Day, let us take a quick Hollywood glimpse at the mother I'm pretty sure I'm going to be:



Also, speaking of mothers and adulthood, the realization that by the end of this year, I will no longer be in my twenties has been hitting me pretty hard lately, mostly because of work stuff but because of some seriously adult decisions I've been having to make in my personal life, too.  

I love, love, love my job, but being an agent who earns the industry-standard commission and doesn't rip people off  means that I have to work other jobs to support my job.  Which, you know, is a lot of jobs.  After a bit of a flip flop from my original plan, I stopped assisting Emily at the end of last year and decided to ramp up my hours at the restaurant during their night shifts.  

I feel like answering phones is kind of an in-your-twenties secondary job, though.  Probably because of the hourly pay.  The idea of doing that until I land my first million dollar deal is daunting now that I'm a person who has ELEVEN white hairs and strange cravings to kiss other people's babies and pretend they're mine.

So what to do?  Turn to the most in-your-twenties anthem I know...and maybe go back to school for my Master's...


Query Critique Winner

Monday, May 2, 2016

Angela is the winner of this month's query critique!  See her original query below:

Dear Carrie:

Yesterday Eve was a high school student with a major case of senioritis. Today? A suicide mission flying the friendly skies.  

Eight years ago her Grandfather disappeared over the Atlantic, leaving behind a scribbled message about family business and a locket Eve swore to keep secret. With no family or reason to stay, a mysterious job offer takes her to Rome, back to familia origins and her grandfather’s missed destination. 

One moment she is making a new friend on a crowded train. The next, an explosion turns the underground Metro to ash. She wakes up unscathed, surging with sentient power and in the middle of an otherworldly family feud. Both sides want the energy now crackling through her.  

Day 1: Rome not a holiday. 

Imbued with stolen alien power, Eve needs to figure out how it works before the ancient race hunts her down. With no one to turn to, she is forced to trust Tre, a supernatural warrior with suspect Babylonian descent. They both want to free the energy pulsing through her, but keeping her alive might be the toughest job he’s had in a thousand years. 

Eve’s soul-searing gift is her salvation and the final link to her missing grandfather, but using it could burn her from the inside out.  

LOGOS is a 80,000 word YA novel that blends fantasy elements like Beautiful Creatures with the international thriller of The Conspiracy of Us. Per your instructions I'm including sample pages below. 

My short stories have been featured in Go Read Your Lunch, The Urban Liaison, and The Idaho Magazine. I am also a contributing member of Treasure Valley Critiquers.  

I look forward to hearing from you. 
Thanks!

And here is my critique!

Dear Carrie:

Yesterday Eve was a high school student with a major case of senioritis. Today? A suicide mission flying the friendly skies. [This sentence confuses me a little bit. Instead of say Eve is a suicide mission, would we be able to change to something like "kamikaze"?] 

Eight years ago, her Grandfather disappeared over the Atlantic, leaving Eve behind a scribbled message about family business and a locket Eve swore to keep secret that she has never shown anyone. With no other family or reason to stay, she jumps to accept a mysterious job offer that takes her to Rome, back to familia origins and her grandfather’s missed destination. [What about this mission makes it suicidal? Connect this back to the opening paragraph and hint at what is going on. It seems from the opening that Eve knows she is doing something with a high amount of risk/danger and that she may hurt not only herself, but other people.]

One moment she is making a new friend on a crowded train. The next, an explosion turns the underground Metro [Should metro be capitalized here? Is the Italian metro called the Metro or something else?] to ash. She wakes up unscathed, surging with sentient power [So the power thinks for itself??] and in the middle of an otherworldly family feud. Both sides want the energy now crackling through her.

Day 1: Rome not a holiday. [This abrupt bit doesn't quite fit here. I would cut.]

Imbued with stolen alien power, Eve needs to figure out how it works before the ancient race hunts her down. With no one to turn to, she is forced to trust Tre [Where did she meet Tre? Is he the friend she was making on the train?], a supernatural warrior with suspect [Why suspect?] Babylonian descent. They both want to free the energy pulsing through her, but keeping her alive might be the toughest job he’s had in a thousand years.

Eve’s soul-searing [Soul-searing? Explain! We haven't heard anything about this power damaging souls before.] gift is her salvation [How it is her salvation? I thought possessing it meant that aliens are trying to kill her!] and the final link to her missing grandfather, but using it could burn her from the inside out. 

LOGOS is a 80,000 word YA novel that blends fantasy elements like Beautiful Creatures with the international thriller of The Conspiracy of Us. Per your instructions I'm including sample pages below.

My short stories have been featured in Go Read Your Lunch, The Urban Liaison, and The Idaho Magazine. I am also a contributing member of Treasure Valley Critiquers.  

I look forward to hearing from you.

Thanks!

Overall, I think this is a tight query that explains the gist of the story well and draws readers in.  I did have a few questions for clarification, and areas to both expand and cut.  With highly saturated genres like sci-fi/fantasy, I think it's also always a good idea to show an agent how your book will stand out in the market while also appeal to a wide readership, which Angela did well via her comps!  

Chime in with your thoughts and questions below 
 
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